Aet Lindling

Granted, but they're all F-s.

Granted, but it's poisoned. I wish I could live forever...

Erm, one thing. Why exactly is this rated PG, given the presence of a certain F-word?

Probably. I can't find much fault, but that's most likely cause I'm preoccupied with writing my own work. Altogether I'd give it a 9/10, 1 point away because I found ...

Some sort of rabid centipede?

Err... Wozzell? What on EARTH does that mean. I mean really, LBu- BI. I thought better of you. Pulling out random words that make no sense. Snozzel? Hmph. (Heh, this ...

Really cool, kudos to you and your brother.

No, really!

I'm really glad to be able to be here, because I need criticism (I just KNOW I spelled that wrong) to improve. No you didn't. Unless you used the Spell ...

How often do you see monkeys as a large part of a story? Or kangaroos? Dragons are much more discussed in stories, Yes, that's what we call a 'cliche' ;). ...

Great poem, my only complaint is the same as my predecessor's, split into stanzas it would be easier to read.

How often do you see monkeys as a large part of a story? Or kangaroos? Dragons are much more discussed in stories, and if one were to judge by design, ...

Wow. Cool. I can't really find any fault in this, though I'm sure others will, ;) but all I can find to say is that some of the rhymes didn't ...

Chapter 2: Aello ( ay -lo) Aello took the steaming loaves of bread out of the large oven, her experienced hands sliding the oval shapes off the pan and into ...

Yeah, you're probably right. Thanks for the advice!